Alot of this seems like your just rhyming for the sake of rhyming. No real goal in the content of it. Just my take. Had some cool syllable matches scattered throughout. I think you need to work on trying to format an outcome. Give yourself a topic. Find a beggining middle and endpoi t and then just start rhyming to achieve what you idea was. This was more like a rhyme flex than anything else. Just didnt have any meaning for me
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