It is hard to separate either on quality of approach. timeless was a bit funnier while Dove Dozer was more serious, neither went too in-depth but that is not a problem at all. The big difference in my view here, is the conciseness of Dove Dozer's writing. The short sentences compare very favorably with some of timeless's more wordy sections. It's only a matter of a few words here and there, but Dove Dozer really cut down to the bare essentials. Also enjoyed the section with the repeated "I was/couldn't/wouldn't" beginnings. Another difference is I didn't really understand the core joke in timeless's submission. Perhaps, it's just me missing the sense of humor, but is the joke that Martin Lawrence is a black man acting in a movie called the 'Black Knight' which the main character confuses for the Batman movie 'the Dark Knight Rises'? If so, I fail to see the big joke. It seems a minor inconvenience at worst, what the issue seems to be is that there was room to make this more funny, but you didn't really grab onto it. Or you went in a different direction and lost the plot a little bit, but still not holding it against you because humor is subjective and I applaud all efforts at humor. In the end, Dove Dozer's lean writing, concise sentences and direct language choice swayed my rationale. Voting for Dove Dozer.
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