ya very cool battle. thanks for the reads.
vulgar - sick imagery and word selection. your shit reads like a scholar wrote it. its next level in that regard. and its rather philosophic. I really enjoyed the fuck out of the verse. you used this rhyme scheme
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not many people can make that work. im usually very against an odd number of lines with the same end rhyme but you pull it off. only thing I wish you did more often was continue your end rhymes to the beginning of the next line more often. you do it here and there and it adds to the flow if you ask me. very good verse
ink- very strong opening. I was impressed. then I noticed that you were just straight re telling the movie and I was disappointed. but as I read on you really highlighted a part of the movie that we didn't get to see. and added a fuck load of emotion. it read very smooth while still seeming complex and I applaud that. one complaint is the briefness. you needed to make it longer. I don't know if you hit the line limit but if you didn't it seemed like you needed more lines to finish up.
very tough battle to decide on. both sick verses. but im a go with the one I enjoyed slightly more and that's
vote- Ink
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