Vulgar, Intoxicatingly immersive; Very centered in your focus; a buzzing stream line of bugged out rhymes. You too roamed into the forrest and really pulled from the souls hazy habitat of creativity. I thought that your verse followed a certain formula; was a lot less dense then last week; but also more on the ball in terms of cohesion. This piece had a eerie honey I shrunk the kids setting in the grass blades happening. The ending really gave this piece some credibility; truly caught the vibe and tied it all together. A very contained wonderment. A real life Ant Farm
Ink,Nice poetic cadence. Flow was first thing that I noticed; a steady beat of expression. Some good writing. I feel the beginning you set was strong enough to let the middle wand a little and then sort of regain consciousness towards the end where you sum it all up. Good journey. Another strong closer.
Votes goes to Vulgar. I wanted to vote for Ink; but he just didn't make the doll come alive in the end; a route I wish he had ventured in.
Thank you for the read
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