lmao.. cdm's first lines slayed me.."since wipes soothed your enflamed anus"... amyways i enjoyed your verse (minus your cap lock getting stuck) i think those little intermediate parts were dope but kind of a way to cheat and convey whatever you wanted without rhyme. other than that i enjoyed the depiction of a few man standing before the lord on this judgemnet day-esque background.. growing up my parents were pretty religious so that always terrified me thinking ill be in ralphs position haha...
split.. damn homie, talk about descriptive detail. i felt like i was reading/watching a movie. your story telling abilities are of the chain as far as imagery and vividness about the smallest items i.e. the windex paper sheets, laser pistols ect.. not gunna lie there were a few places that went over my head but i think thats cuz i need to expand my vocab..
in the end you both did aweaome but im going with what i liked more.. splits verse
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