I actually read this yesterday in the closed battles section and it was dope then and dope now.
With precision and skill, the deliberate drill riddles the bone
Spiraling slow, in the middle until, the parietal lobe
Is exposed , and the fissure to fill, shimmers and glows-
Not a little would spill…. as the enhanced bot’s hands,
Twiddle the swill that grasps his last glimmer of hope
^^^Dope opener.
I loved the lines as well where basically every word was a rhyme like the first Parkinson's bar. I love shit like that lol. But as for the concept I think it's brilliant going with that quote and I can't remember who you had to face in the AOWL but anyone would have trouble beating this. As for the story, I'm assuming at the end you realize he hasn't cured anything and he's just gone mad, am I right?
But all in all this a great verse, I've seen better from you but this is still a great and fun read. Btw I kept picturing Michael J. Fox as I read this....
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