Trajik takes this easy because he had a complete verse. I enjoyed coming to a conclusion on his where I didn't like JW's cliffhanger.
Trajik. I like when you include slant rhymes. Lyrically sound as always. Good story. Not a lot of awkward wording.
JW. good start. Autistic princess/ pause for a minute was clutch. Looking forward to a developed drop. Good use of assonance within lines
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