Zygote. Kitschy. The idea that we will b exterminated by autonomous paper clip factories had me rolling... But also terrified. Word choice was good. I like your line lengths.solid angle that made for an interesting verse.
Frank. Lol what the fuck did this have to do with the topic. I mean, I saw what you said before you deleted it and I guess there's a connection, but not to th idea of the topic. Reaching or I'm missing it completely. I appreciate your gentle diction. Storytelling here felt clumsy, I think you approached this too much like a short story...
Wditing a better vote tomorrow
Enjoyed Zyogtes Verse a lot more and voted for him
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