dead man, what makes your verse stand out, is the connections from line to line that transitions so smoothly, as you tied together delicate phrases that draws an image of a person who is buried alive. I like the sort of direct take on the topic & your concept was good. timeless, while you had some good phrases, I didn't really get much from your story. Whereas your opponent had a clear take on the topic, I couldn't really tie too much together from what was presented. The opening lines were awkward; mainly because what came after felt detached. Nonetheless, it was an interesting read, but dead man wrote just as well, while having a better overall concept. MVGT: dead man. Good job by both competitors.
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