[Mr. J]

I don't know what these other two are talking about...

Story, I felt your verse was nice for what it was, it was short, sweet
and showed very subtle signs only recognized by the experience of life
it draws you in as you continue through, adding more to the piece
it's a little more abstract then one would like to understand but I see it
very well done sir...I applaud you...

Zen, You take a step in the opposite direction still showing the same vibe
but in different aspects as well as a different story that shines very well
you add visual which is great especially for the limit given to you both
drawing in not only the character you created but also the reader as well
I felt like this piece was very well done, nice work

v/I feel both competitors really did work as far as short verse goes
you really attach this sort of grasping tale together and make it easy to read
most people would turn their verses into paragraphs, you two didn't
you laid down some nice work fella's...but...my vote has to go to Zen
he had the better verse, Story delivered very well though and shined
nice battle fella's