kannon - cool take on the topic. Consistent tone throughout, which is especially important when it's a character's thoughts. Rhythm and energy of the verse was very good, and complemented the character's energy/positive attitude. First verse was maybe just a little too long. I think the four lines from 'layer the samples' to 'horror flick' were the weakest in your verse and could've been cut... my battle writing background perhaps makes me overly critical of simple similes and wordplays. Others might like that section. Rhymes were pretty simple for the most part. Not so simple that it took away from your verse - if this was an OM piece I wouldn't even bother to comment on it, - but in a battle it can be a weakness in comparison to your opponent's verse. Overall enjoyable verse, good job.
Greed - not sure if you're improving drastically week to week or just giving progressively more of a fuck. Either way, your verse last week was much better than I had expected judging by your previous work and your verse this week was that again, so kudos. Your take on the topic - a tension filled narrative that ends in literally turning (over) a table - was cool. In the beginning your rhyme schemes were pretty dope, they faded to basic towards the middle/end BUT your wording and descriptors got better... the trade off between them is obvious. I thought this verse was quite good. Some turns of phrase were particularly enjoyable eg 'blue balls for lady luck' and the pandemonium/linoleum lines were slick.
Very close. I had ever so slightly more to criticise about kannon's verse, which makes me lean towards Greed. Good battle fellas.
V/ Greed
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