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Old 11-07-2014, 04:22 PM   #2
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Well after "Sinister" I kind of lost interest then I got to the half and half
and thought this could have been cream if he followed through with how the beginning went
after reading on I felt you just got drunk slurred half the text and went off on a tangent
otherwise I kept reading and realized you were doing pretty good at linking it all together
but it just seemed like it happened a little later than how you started off
it was a cool little read though, I wasnt blown away...but I wasn't disappointed either
keep writing young one
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