Ok.
Yyou have some cool concepts floating around. I think you need most of your work on A: pulling the idea together a little better for more impact, and B: catching more of a flow/rhyme schem in your lines
Seems like this piece is getting slept on. I see you dropped links as well. Cudos for that.. its appreciated. Hopefully this ill catch some feed and people will stop sleeping. Stay active though. The more you show yourself the more people will get a feel for you and reply to your shit
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