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Old 11-06-2014, 02:04 PM   #6
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lol @ kins lisp reference. I did feel it was a little misdirected, but it was funny. I also feel the wording was a bit weird on the second line, like you could have changed readin to reads or something just to make it flow better and make more sense grammatically speaking.

Broke, I had to do some research but found the song u based ur punch off of. I think u kept it simple, but its gonna work in your favor here. You had a personal aspect, and it was current as well. Simple but effective.

If this was based on comedy alone, kin would definitely get this, but his punch coulda been directed at anyone other then the fact lesnar fit in with the lisp angle of the set up. I've gotta give this to broke for having a more effective punch.

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