Sharp: I liked the opener and the closer and the bodybuilding line. The two lines about his kids could have been harsher. I feel like there was a lot of uncovered ground with that. Most of your lines were at least decent, though.
Packed Graves: Everything of any mass has its own shadow. That's an Internet T-shirt, not a feminine one. (I get the pussycat attempt, but the wording botched it.) And he doesn't look like Ashton Kutcher or Shaggy (from Scooby Doo or the singer). He looks a little like Justin Long. The computer section line had some potential, but that's it.
Vote: Sharp
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