[IamBenT]

Wow... just wowzers

Topical - Fantastic scheme again, your word choices are impeccable and the rhyme is poetic and effortless through about 85 percent of this. Some of the lines suffered from being TOO wordy, where a more succinct and direct description would have made your picture clearer, kind of like comparing Fitzgerald to Hemingway though its a matter of taste lol, The basic metaphor driving the piece is very smart. My only complaint is the piece lacks a feeling of being grounded in reality and giving me someone or something that I can really relate to, but that is the price of a universal fable so to speak. however, loved the verse and the message throughout.

Zen - Wow the rhyming here is solid, every week you are just doper and doper with the concepts, I love the twist at the end because I did NOT see that coming, I thought maybe they would make up or something but holy crap. Sometimes just a hint of ultra-violence can go along way especially as you used foreshadowing very well to hint at doom to come. the use of James Pine was a bit confusing to me, i thought maybe you were relating to the actor lol all in all a solid verse and showing.

Vote -TopicalDood5 damn as much as i like Zen's verse, I just feel he was outgunned by someone who has been penning verse for what seems to be a long time. Great battle, so far one of the best I have read this week.