[IamBenT]

Interesting battle.

Zygote - Man you are killing me with these long ass lines of yours, im searching deeply for inter rhyme, slant rhyme, off rhyme VISUAL rhyme, something. Its all good though. As far as story goes, the concept is a bit stale, as in we have seen this same idea everywhere from The Matrix to Eagle Eye, hell 2001 even touches on this a bit. But I like how its PAPERCLIPS lol of all the useless stupid shit a machine would destroy an entire race over, that was very wry and sick to me. Some of the middle parts of this verse were pretty hot as well, and I like how you didn't wait too long to tell us how life is Over with and its all paperclips, but I just wish there was more conflict or tension in the story to keep me interested throughout.

Frank - Great multies and flow. Read it twice trying to figure out how it went with the topic, however, and I really still don't see how, Hopefully someone will enlighten me. Great attention to detail in this portrait, but at times it seemed static and just "well here's larry, he's a bum, but he's making the best of it", and no real light on where he's going from there or how him (or perhaps his situation?) is a threat to the world or human life. I love the use of the length, but some lines seemed a bit filler-ish.

Vote -Zygote for a verse that fit better for me and wasn't THAT far from Frank on technical grounds. BOTH were good stories!