[Dominate]

Alrighty. Disclaimer: as I said in the chat, I feel somewhat uncomfortable casting the deciding vote here bc I'm new to non-battle writing. I'm sure you'd prefer a more experienced person to be voting in my place, but alas, one is not forthcoming. Please excuse me if I miss things. I probably will. I'm sorry :(


Buddha: vocab is impressive, as is the way you weave in and out of mythological references and human emotions. I dug your approach, it was creative. Your rhymes are there, too. I think the length of your lines is just way too much in places, though, and that detracts from any sense of rhythm. Although I did like the approach I think you spent too much time describing the altercation with Zeus and it's consequence - in places it even felt repetitive. I was more digging the descriptions of the god and her perceptions of the human society below, and I think that fit the topic better. How she got there wasn't even necessary but if you had to include it it should've been much briefer IMO. Still, impressive verse.

Kannon: I think your take on the topic was more apt, if less creative. You outrhymed and outrhythmed your opponent handily. Although I liked your concept, I think it could've been fleshed out a little more. It wasn't incomplete, but I wanted to know more about the characters and their motivations. In parts it felt like the rhymes dominated too much - as in, it seemed like the story was crafted around the rhymes instead of vice-versa.

So basically, I thought Buddha wrote too much and Kannon didn't write enough. Buddha's vocab and descriptions were better, Kannon's rhymes and rhythm were better. Very close battle. Overall I'm left feeling more satisfied by Buddha's verse, so my vote goes to him

v/ Buddha