NYCSPITZ - A lofty but vivid little exposition; great understated brush strokes throughout that in a select few instances ventured from the right mix of sharp and vague into the zone of the poetically bothersome. Mechanically it degenerated as well - never into anything outrageous mind you, but noticable. Great conceptual groundwork and your execution was solid with plenty of enjoyable highlights to it. Nice stuff
deadman - your tone and delivery appeals to me, a sort of quilt of seemingly (at least on the surface) disjointed observations that when brought together becomes greater than the sum of the parts. Personable and technical execution with a guiding principle of pithy, eliminating excess of syllables that accomplish little to nothing, overall in favor of fluidity.
Enjoyable match to read, razor edge close, but I'll go with NYCSPITZ for a more fleshed out reading experience (not in the sense that it was longer but rather well-utilized spacing and relevant development)
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