lovely battle you two
Copy I noted a distinctly different tone from you here. More of an analytical perspective, lined with a thoughtful perspective that didn't suffer from the humor you usually bring to the table. The humor can work at times obviously but whenever I think good prose I think Hemingway who's laconic and serious. You got closer to that here imo, and although you would maybe beat hemingway in a topical battle he'd dust all of us in prose so there's something to learn there. I thought the social commentary worked worlds better here just because of the more straightforward take on it and because the picture obviously lent itself to it. Maybe a lot more literal than Certain's but sometimes that works and you definitely pulled off something great here. Good verse my dangling ass muh fucka...
Certain that was OD, definitely a nice twist to the storytelling there. Painting the kid as some innocuous ant killer then making him an incestual rapist wasn't expected at all but definitely is a genius level connection from psycho animal killing (albeit at a lower level of animal) to human killing. I think since seaz 3 you've elevated yourself onto the platform of elite storyteller and your verse this week, as well as all your previous verses from the season (esp when the dude stole cash then killed everybody but died at the end) finally cements you as a top killer in the league. Storytelling is such a dynamic thing that it always has the potential to topple even the best braggadocio and philosophical/pyschology verses
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