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Old 10-25-2014, 08:43 AM   #4
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As good a talent that tha Talent possesses, he's one of my least favorite around here, only because he's boring to me. I think he puts way too much time into little details and it subtracts the tone of his pieces to a monotone. Its probably just me, but hey. Now that that's out of the way, the storytelling in this was crisp as usual. Although I felt that there were too many characters introduced. Dope last line, kind of cliche in a sense but I enjoyed it. The last stanza seemed forced, rhyming names of people was an eyesore. Not bad though, after another read it probably is my favorite of yours this season aside from week 1. Opening few lines from Copy were dope. Although I did enjoy this verse, it just seemed to struggle halfway through and to the ending. Natural read with lots of great wordplay throughout, making me wanting to read it a second a third time. Not your strongest effort, though. Easy vote here imo.

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