This is good free form and less rhyme-centric writing. Only one critique for the use of the two "I's." Somehow the omnipresent narration felt much stronger than when you switched to that kind of disinterested first-person. The little sign-off at the end only further makes these two I's feel out of place. The character is a nice three dimensional being, I especially enjoyed the nuanced maturity with which you enmeshed his personal life and his professional life. E.g., "Living outside those margins, red doodles in a yellowing memo book. An empty masters- the room you left, and maybe wake up from..." It is quite sad, I understand that strange feeling of respect mixed with pity (I guess?) when you know someone who is seemingly completely dedicated to their work to the exclusion of other interests. You really elicited this balance between respect and pity (again, I'm not sure if pity is right, but I can't think of a better word for it). This could have so easily been condescending or unintentionally mean-spirited but it wasn't. It maintained that level of respect throughout, and that was the key for the strength of the overall writing here.
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