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Old 10-22-2014, 04:08 AM   #10
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Chess/checkers
Reject that conjecture
Fault lines
Impressionist sketch
Dollar/ bank
Foolish observer rhyme scheme

My favorites

One of your best flexes. Certainly one of the best flexes in the OM in the past two months. Wish the rhyming was as snappy throughout the piece with more consistency, though I realize that over-rhyming can be very tiresome for the reader if not carefully managed. In this respect, I think you could improve. You have a great control over your meter and rhythm, and IMO certain portions of your drops are the site benchmark for having natural sentence structure while maintaining buttery wording. Juggling act. But you can improve your drops in the holistic sense, like when and where to apply what talents and to what degree

For someone coming off of a half-year hiatus this was unreal
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