[Adonis]

Muzz - This was some personal shit and i'd say 8-10 you won't get the vote in doing these types of verses because it actually shows a lack of thought provoking or ground breaking material. Aside from that, skill wise I thought this was lacking. I could gather no sense of structure or schemes, more of you just writing what comes out. Which might be good in some cases, but in this case the verse just sort of moved along giving me no true connection emotionally or rise intellectually. I read it, and that was it.

Jay - Not quite sure about the picture in the end, but you did enough to get the win here. I especially appreciated the structure, you matched syllables which I used to be big on and sense have strayed away, but it's always fun to read something that reminds me of the olden days. The concept was cool, the execution was lacking. I got the sense you didn't try very hard due to not enjoying topic choice and reading your opponents verse.

Voting MR.J for the having the more enjoyable read.