[UnbornBuddha]

A spectacular showmanship. Since both of you displayed lyrical eminence. Soulstice wording is more elegant than Witty's, not to say Witty's is not, but relatively speaking there is a more of a sophistication. I interpreted the narrative as one of romance. The first verse was a scenic memory of where they first met, and the years between is the up and downs of their relationship. This up and down included not being together, as he watched the love of his life flirt with other men temporarily of course. When they finally were together the realization hits the narrator. That this romance too, is nothing but an illusion, a disappearing act destined to happen. The only true soul mate in this instance is death. The death of what seemed fated to be, a contrite conclusion was reached. While I did enjoy the smoothness of it all, I have to say there was a tad of artistry missing.
Thus, I proceed to Witty's reimagining of a fairy tale. Well, what can I say. A bit gruesome, perhaps even more so than the retelling from the grim brothers. Yet, as they were murdered there was undoubtedly a sense of mystical allusion that you captured well. You managed to fabricate the fantasy through selectively conjuring a setting that apprehended the aura around the tales. Now with tales there's always a mystique to them, a myth if you will. Thus, it makes sense to be able to manipulate the myth, or expose it to tell others of its true contents. This felt like this was the path this took. And although you sullied the goodness inherent in that of a children's tale, nevertheless it is imaginative to be able to tell it in such vivid depiction. However, as the story progressed the ending I found was predictable. Not a bad thing, per se, yet the progression seemed to come to a stand still at some point. The climatic value of it went down before even the character's downfall. Still, I felt it was an artwork to witness, to say the least. I also am a sucker for tales, although this was a bit more perverse.

Anyways, my vote is for Witty.