well first of all i can't believe i read this fuckin thing. second i was literally gonna vote for muzzle for the sole purpose of him being ALL over the topic. i usually dont read the other votes ahead of me but i did this time cause i was like wtf MrJ. then certain explained the devil thing and then i re-read ur verse and it all made sense. stupid that i couldn't see it myself.. lol.
Muzz i gotta say u really really wrote to the topic and incorporated every part of the quote so well done on that end but yeah i totally agree with certain. u have some storytelling potential and can probly turn out to be good but u gotta start rhyming man. if u dont wanna do that, its fine. but then THIS is not the place for u. read soem dead man, like ANY and ALL deadman verses to see how to flow. unfortunately in this competition u have to rhyme. ur just NOT doing that
MRJ. again agree with curtain. u made this way closer then it should have been ahhaa
once i understood what u were going for though u easily won only because muzz doesn't rhyme anything. but story wise it was pretty damn close bro. i think u know u will have to do better though so im not worried
Vote: MJ
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