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Old 10-19-2014, 09:39 PM   #8
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witty - fuck man u started off really well. particularly enjoyed this set..
People weep, begin to pray, as many others leave, disillusioned
This confusion makes her mind take a leap to a sick conclusion
Day crawls to night, trees seem to be gaining in height and menace
She finds a crevice, somewhere she can lay and wait for the fight
Relentless, as she aims for the right place to ignite the blaze
fairy tale shit. fucking dope bro. u carried the rhymes real good throughout the entire piece. great flow. really good piece. this is going to be a hard call.
soulstice - fuck dude i felt the whole fucking verse than was left standing there at the end like "WHAT NOW FUCKER"idk. why u gotta leave me hanging like that? i guess wanting more.. is the tell of a greater writer.. but shit. i really, truly, needed more.. more than i wanted it.
where did it go? what happened? i really needed a stronger conclusion bruh. you couldve taken this if it was wrapped upa bit more.

/v witty - just felt like his piece was more complete. even though i was more intrigued by soulstice, i ... got more from witty's complete piece. and this was a hard fucking call. wrap it up bro. thats all i got to say.
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