nycspitz- overall this was pretty fucking sick. like where you went with the topic. just lost me at times. some of my favorite lines...
A black winged Shinigami circles the Ronin, watch as the ground crackles and puffs
the Death God closes his fist - turning fifty men and all the surrounding gravel to dust
that supernatural shit was dope as fuck. really felt it. some of the foreign terms were a little overused, but.. well, nicknames or abbreviations wouldn't really have worked. but that's to be expected from a story based in a foreign settings. differentiation in rhymes and syllable counts didn't help too much. i can't really tell you what's missing here... but i feel like something is. that's all i can say.
/v certain - with all due respect, your opponent i feel should've won. but. well. your delivery was better. catchy as fuck. tight, efficient. likeable. enjoyed the fuck out of it. want a burrito right now tbh. i feel like there's something missing here, perhaps some lennon reference? idk. the beatles were destined to fail. but.. i feel like you were saying " i could blame it on whatever but... actually.." in all reality, i have no fucking clue why i enjoyed your verse more. i simply.. did. and i'm really into that samurai shit. so, that's saying something.
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