defiant, there are many issues with your verse - in terms of wording, mechanics and overall vision - but it did have one thing if nothing else: this pretty appealing sincerity. Which is more worth than technical prowess if you have will and honesty - much as it is when trying to quit benzodiazepines. DD - cool verse within the confines of so few lines, sentience is always an interesting topic and you did what you could with it and wrote to your opponent's weakness without over-exerting yourself. Vote goes to Dove Dozer due to stronger thematic elements.
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