Listen - I very much enjoyed reading the story progression but thought it ended anti-climactically. Could see it coming from a mile away to be honest. THought you could add a few more layers to it to add some depth and tighten up the wording which got sloppy not much but more often than it should have.
unborn - enjoyed the use of language. Good story and delivery, thought you edged listen here. Your story wasn't as straightforward, but even with a stretched line or two you brought more to the table overall this time imo. Evangelical goblins line was hot
good battle
v/ unborn
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