Defiant: I'm not sure why you do that with your font, but no one here cares about long lines (see: Frank, zygote and others) as long as they rhyme well. You didn't. This verse was pretty elementary in all regards. The rhyming was weak, the cadence was off and the story line was trite. You need to really bring a character to life if you're going to do the first-person reflection angle. Or you could do more with lyricism. But then there's the additional issue that your verse had nothing to do with the topic. Your previous submissions were better.
Dove Dozer: My approach to this topic would have been similar to this, though more developed as I'm sure you would have been had you needed to or had the time to commit to a more developed story. I liked this as the start, though, and I thought you did a good job with the simple personification verse that is so common. Your mechanics were fine. For 10 lines, this was good.
Vote: Dove Dozer
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