NYCSPITZ - Lost my first breakdown for this, but I thought it was pretty cool with moments of sickness. The rhyming was good for the most part except for the 'wickedest of shoulds' part which was forced. You kept me interested with active details, and it wasn't cliché or anime in any obvious, contrite way. Strong effort here, this would be tough for anyone to beat because you pulled the 'action' card.
Certain - I was surprised by the honesty in this, since every other line was layered and had different dimensions of meaning. At first, I was skeptical about where it was going to go. Some of the build up was plain sounding, but you managed to breathe relevant life into it using personal touch and a degree of reality. I was more satisfied by your verse than NYC's, more affected, and that was what tipped the scales for me.
Nice battle.
Vote - Certain
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