[UnbornBuddha]

Good job gentleman I enjoyed both verses. They were both short and sweet. Dissected further, Split's reads like a United nations peroration. A homily of hope against the despair of visual and statistical signs of doom. A brief disquisition entailing the remedy toward ill effect ramifications that plague us so. The wording, and imagery were very synchronous with the rhythmic enthusiasm of a well delivered speech, which emphasizes inspiration against a background of annihilation and abomination.

Timeless, on the other hand, tackled the topic more head on distilling an individual who was recently let go. The allusion of the weekdays is used to emphasize the daily routine of labor being forsaken by a termination date. Instead of a rest period on the weekdays the character now is on a permanent vacation. However, as he ponders the crossroads of his life contemplating rebellion, part of the process of the misery stricken thoughts that accompany dismissal. As all these ideas unravel, the character comes upon a penny and awakens to the realization of the need to unwind, and appreciate the flow in which life is being presented, even that which seems unfortunate and trivial.

In the end, I resonated more with Split's approach. It had more of a rectifying effect on eliciting a suspenseful peak. That zenith component needed to grab the attention of the reader, in any good old fashion literary telling. It took some semblance to that Charlie Chaplin speech in the Great Dictator.

Vote: Split

Thank you