The title lured me in because I am evil and I think your biggest strength here was execution of the concept. I think the flow started with the opening bar as killer but it dipped just a little bit in the second bar towards the middle. Not a huge deal by any means because you merely need to just delete a word or two here and there. The tone you held onto was cool and I enjoyed the piece. I would only suggest elaborating on pointless posts a bit more to add more depth to it and deleting a word or two for flow like I said earlier.
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Your posts I do not care for.
Often wonder "D fuckz it der fer?!"
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