Funny read, I like the concept a lot, very creative...I think the flow and caedence could have been better, but didn't see a huge problem with it...biggest thing I noticed is the lack of punchlines, gotta hit them more imo! Over decent drop tho 6/10 imo, couple small things couldve easily brought it up to 7-7.5 imo...keep it up tho, I enjoyed the creativity very much tho! My fav part was..."Let me into the netcee's",
I've humbly crossed the river, and stood:
right where I'm standing, looking for your hand"
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Ya I feel some type a way
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