[Adonis]

Split - This verse was pretty dope. I loved the message you got across and how you got there. This verse had a lot of ideas, different ideas at that. I snickered at the Al-Quida ISIS line, but thought the ideals behind pre-sized trees and raffling off prayer rugs was especially unique, then you said dramatize war or put sex on a pedestal. Some very solid writing/rhyming and schemes, but it was all out done by the ideas behind the individual lines. I took this as "the rebuilding" of Iran after America is finished committing genocide on the good and bad natured humans alike. I have zero complaints with this verse and thought it was the perfect length, as I'm sure you would have run out of ideas to add thus adding dribble rather then shooting straight for the target. I will say that reading this verse didn't give me a clear cut, direct route to the topic per say, but it did trim around the edges a bit.

Time - Ironic name given the time jumps in this short verse. Went from home, to talking to your boss, to walking in the street talking to himself it seems. Tough to keep up with this verse even as I've read a few times. I don't get who he's talking to after he left his boss, not sure if he got laid off or not. In fact, the conversation started off good, with company growth, then he gets a salad bowl and is in the street starring at a penny. I assume you jumped around on purpose, but I however can not make sense of it all. I also didn't like 'acid, zoned/ tragic crossroads' scheme. Felt that fell way short.


Voting split

He had the clearer vision to me, with a higher level of execution in my eyes.