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Witty
Very tender, organic language. Completely separate from status quo "love poetry" that gets gushy but never conveys real emotional content. You delivered on this one with a heartfelt story. The reader is introduced to the main character thoroughly, and the opening language prepares the reader for a crescendo of disappointment; an outcome usually associated with a death caused by cancer. I thought this was really good, Witty.
Keep doing you