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Old 10-13-2014, 11:29 PM   #18
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Zen ruined hollandaise and now you, too? Damn it, Zen. This was very good, downbeat and reflective but with your trademark sense of wit that most of us lonely saps here lack. The rhymes were a bit more askew than normal at times, but they come so rapidly as to make up for any overly aggressive slants. I didn't like the repeating of glass and full in the last few rhymes. It seemed like you had an idea for how to end it but couldn't work it into your scheme on first attempt and didn't bother closing as well as you could have. This reminded me a bit of our collaboration from a year ago as well as your collaboration with Zen. I wish you many flat-chested blondes.
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