Holy shneezy-smoke-grenades...
You did your damn thing here Zygote. Rawness all around. Usually the "alphabetical" slaughter type of piece gets sour very quickly but your twist on it in just utilizing the a's and b's really worked here. I read it the whole way through and never stopped because it was awkward or forced and the rhyme scheme was fire in some places which is double-impressive because of the word limitations. I'm going to quote my favorites. Bravo, this might be my favorite of all your work, ever.
before a beast a basilisk, always breathing acidous,
but after a body as broken as a beadless abacus,
^Slick.
before amphitheatres, basically atheist believer,
abiogenesis – before archosaurs, before animals, before amoebas.
a billion ages back, aminoacid blocks,
ancestral bacteria appeared before any bony arthropods.
Archaea brought across by asteroid belts accompanied by acid base acetate,
became animate, basic adaptations, afterwards bipedal apes.
but anyway beaten absolutely black and blue, and baselessly accused,
became amused by alien beings always blamed as aerial balloons,
^section was ill.
Ageless, baseless, an agnostic believing after abdominal bleeding,
Ancient blasphemer as brutal as battle armies besieging.
^Point taken.
Keep doing you
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