Vote: Unborn Buddha
Overall effort, execution, & everything else was a step up from his opponent. Pat could've out rhymed his opponent but instead chose not to, neglecting the chance to capitalize on his only opportunity of obtaining a W in the win column here. Unborn Buddhas 'verse' read more like a 'scroll' to me. There were a few instances where Unborn Buddha displayed a good grasp of syllabication, and strung together a few strings of compelling rhymes. Though, the majority was written in a strange format that, although I found interesting, wasn't especially impressive, in this outlets context. The content was dope though, really thought provoking entry with great vocabulary. The structure was sub par, to say the least though. I can't really put a finger on this piece, you as a character, or the impact you will have yet, but I can honestly say, I will be watching and look forward to your progression. You actually remind me of a young Zygote. (whom I've beaten numerous times) As for Patrown; all I can say is: Try to go 40 lines for once in your life.
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