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Old 10-12-2014, 10:44 PM   #9
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Mr j - love how u worded a lot of this piece. Definitely had some good cadence going
.i wasnt sure what was going on until about halfway through, and tbh, i wasnt tripen. Good piece.. voupdve taken this easily with some more plot development.

/v Vulgar- i feel like his plot progression and approach were on lock. Also was very creative. Didnt se much room for constructive criticism. More well rounded piece won.
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