NYCSPITZ - A level of wording, consistently true to the setting, that started solid/strong and dropped off just a little bit towards the end - sprinkled here and tehre with semi-forced stuff like "evil composure". It had a strong framework and clear idea
kannon - "recount twice" created this weird association to recount's noun form where my mind wandered off thinking "so the third count is superflous?" but yeah, that was completely random - tight flow and all, but this is criminally underdeveloped and too general in scope to hit the right notes.
Fairly obvious outcome, the more developed piece wins. Vote: NYCSPITZ
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