Pancake - I don't fucking understand why people write no-show verses for topicals. It's not like your material is aimed at your opponent, or you can get away with generic punchlines like in text battles. You're writing for the topic - so there's no reason you shouldn't have at least the semblance of a verse together - and then just piece it together and post it, even if its not complete. Boggles my mind - you'd be better off just no-showing. Also, I know Pancake has too much machismo running through his veins to admit that he fucked up and try to replace his shitty verse because he might actually get beat in the traditional way, so its easier to forget this ever happened and focus on next week.
Defiant - your storyline had a potentially interesting hook - the serial killer who recreates the same murder over and over again due to a pathology based on a past lover. The problem is that you never gave us too much of his psychology in any kind of refined or sophisticated way. The story was as flat as piss on a plate. If you had developed more interiority for this guy, or spruced it up with more intricate rhyming then you probably could've pulled something better off here. As it stands, it's just kind of ho-hum and you're lucky that a beast of a competitor straight didn't give a fuck this week.
Vote - Defiant.
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