[Cereal_Killa]

NYC:
Man I need this style of story, the way its writing especially..
“The sun drenched atrium yellows her toga; this estate is immaculate
as Hera Maximinius thinks - their mercenaries were raided in Nazareth”

OUCH!
“when the prize is just the greed in their hearts”

You turned my head into a funnel, with all prior wording and story.. and then
“I led a frontal rush”
As my thoughts drip drip.. your
“horse in our myriad chariots.”
So colourful flies off into a nice split on the stanza with your characters statement..

The character now turns into a statue.. The dying breath from Theodus was attractive just wasting his time..

ignoble : you taught me a new word by turning me into a statue.. the way you did it..

beauty couplets btw..

for an idea..

WOah dude im just sayen even the closer was hot.. well done and more than needed in my opion..

Kannon:
Thought processing intro is nice son :)

The crusade/ the mission – as the adventure begins..
what was vowed mine
serenity surrounds outside
The pain is already raw and real even by the drop of the soft sounds outside the true feeling of the opening line doesn’t leave..

All men must fall... All kings must end dethroned
All battles must be won, and all crowns must be owned
I say when you swing with that malice it cracks my cranium..

Our greatest stories always start with all the dreams we sow
But my path to victory is paved with many lives being owed

This was truly beautiful sound alikes.. suited direct to my flava..

Nice closing couple of stanzas, kinda like violent jump rope.. and the homecoming king is berry bery cute sir..
Nice verse ty

Vote: NYCSPITZ

Very nice battle guys, just for a more advanced world.. Kannon was mostly emotion.. And more so just a drop of emotion.. just like kilroy peeking over the page.. ty