i make comments about the writing before i read other people's comments (for obvious reasons).
but now as i scroll above it would appear that this was a collab.
i stand by what i said, of course #3 doesn't "go with" #1&2,
but on it's own it is fine.. took me some re-reads/examination because the first time reading the whole thing i was thrown off by the change. but IMO even the end of #3 is still different from the rest of #3. Split if that's you, it would appear we just have different styles. i "got" most of it; not all. and i guess somewhere in my comments there's a pun about the word split
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