Dead man - fun verse for what it was. Would sound pretty slick as an audio, I'd imagine. A shame you weren't able to post a proper verse for whatever reason, this might've been a pretty epic battle. It really speaks to your talent that even when you obviously just throw some last minute shit together it's still kind of dope. Clearly I'm not voting for you against Certain's verse, but I'm impressed nonetheless by the quality of what you can slap together in a pinch. Hope to read a real verse from you next week :)
Certain - dope! Flow/rhythm/cadence/whatever you OM people call it were perfect throughout the entire length of your verse, aided by your regular use of multi syllable rhymes, with some more complex schemes in places, for extra points. Content wise, really enjoyable. The tone was lighthearted, yet you built the tension beautifully. I also really liked the way you sprinkled fun little details into your scenes like the cat patrolling for pests. The twist at the end was unexpected as you'd already addressed the idea of luck ruining your character's life from the get go. Very enjoyable read.
V/ Certain
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