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senseless deceit tends to be cheap
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My favourite rhymes nowadays are these quick jabs in the middle of a line. I don't know what to call them, but they add so much to a piece.
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She’s the antonym of a feminine mogul - a fake cologne of poetry
Chromosomally sewn with dopamine and age-old codeine rosaries
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the "O" sound rhymes can so easily become played - we've seen all the "hope, rope, broke" rhyme done to death.. this was refreshing to see a scheme that can so easily be derailed used so effectively, especially "codeine rosaries"
The piece itself.. I did enjoy the portrayal of the vapidness of a certain class of modern woman with the use of classical allusions. I was more interested in the mechanics though. I dig your pieces because I feel like there's something to be learned in the writing style and this certainly had some nice mechanics.