Muzzle - Decent verse. Your method of spinning a narrative isn't half bad, in actuality. Carry yourself with more confidence and better rhyming and I think you'll be a unique voice here. In your interpretation of the topic, you wrote two separate stories to the same theme. I preferred the second one because the beginning of your first one was a little bit tired with the description of the guy's motives for seeing a prostitute. Second one was cool and easily relatable. Unless we're referring to husbands cheating on their wives... with Netcees. 0_0
Witty - Fiery ending, you pulled off the crescendo effect well. The beginning oozed blandness. Starting off in a plain way is not the way to go, IMO, because it bars creativity when you keep to such a "general" style. I'd like to see you get wilder with your settings, characters and introductions. All in all, this was a fairly eloquent drop. It had the right ingredients to make it work. I wasn't inspired by it but it had moments of lyrical strength. Give yourself a chance to rack up a string of wins and your motivation to write will go "bazinga!"
Vote - Witty
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