Muzzle:
Honestly? I was digging your concept. I was was so into the tone and the aggressive nature of your writing... I felt it. Truth be told, it was not as well written as Witty, and you left some opportunities on the table, BUT the biggest disappointment came in how YOU DIDNT tie in both stories!
I was sooooo interested in reading the second part because I SWORE the man killed by the pimp was the husband of the wife in the second part. Major let down.
Witty:
You suffered from middle part snooze... The beginning was good and the ending was RAW! However, the middle? Made me want to get to the end quicker. I really dug the ending and that raw style and just no holding back emotion with well worded concepts.
With that said...
v/Witty
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