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Originally Posted by Woosah
i admit i need work, but its like my brain shuts off when i look at a piece of paper, idk what words to use or even what direction i want to go.
i'm basically rhyming words and then mushing dumb shit inbetween them.
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i know exactly how bad you suck. i am going to be harsh, but fair.
worry about content, dont worry about rhyming. then pm me what you have. make sure to include detail, but don't strain it or make it corny. make it from the heart. feel free to use a thesaurus. but don't rhyme. and try to end these thoughts incompletely. like
sometimes I look at the moon when its <
incomplete. that's what i want
remember what type of things you were feeling when you wrote about the moon, and keep in mind things you want to say. make it shorter than you'd usually do, but make it respectable. think of words, and adjectives. and try to use differently formulas. don't do this >
sometimes i
something i feel
sometimes
etc etc.
dont do that. think of ways to expand and what you're trying to say. it's to sound less monotone and keep the reader intrigued like
when i look at the moon, it's light captures my daze >
with a jumpstart of reflection off the suns infecting amorous ways
simple. and quick. sometimes i understand what you say when you 'try' to mash. dont do that. keep in mind what you're saying and use context to guide the reader. I want 20 of these sentences with incomplete thoughts pmed to me. i will make you better than @
PancakeBrah by next year.